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-Ayane-
Joined: 29 Dec 2009 Posts: 21 Location: Inside your undies ;)
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Post subject: Love Like Romeo & Juliet |
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Romeo apart of a hundred miles,
Astray from Juliet's serenade sight,
Trigger her tears to meekly fall,
Demolishing her everglowing spirit.
Darkness clothes on Heaven rim,
As a rose breathe in dark forest,
Her aura evolve into windswept pity,
Turning into storm paralyzed entirety.
Every thought of the knight,
Swaying his sword in war,
Roaming in the aphotic forest,
Tainting the soul of rose.
Reincarnation of light,
Unclothe the holy heaven,
Solacing rose and forest,
Arise with the return of knight.
By me / ayane / erin <3 |
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Tue Dec 29, 2009 11:36 am |
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Zebruh
Joined: 10 Dec 2007 Posts: 1537 Location: Massachusetts
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I liked the replacement for night with "Knight."
But honestly, I didn't read anything else.
It's too difficult to keep my attention with text. _________________ ಡ u ಡ
Ręp time. |
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Tue Dec 29, 2009 8:44 pm |
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-Ayane-
Joined: 29 Dec 2009 Posts: 21 Location: Inside your undies ;)
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Lmao! its not night actually..its actually about the love between me and a guy that i like...so i use romeo represent him and juliet as me..
Well for the third stanza..the knight mean my beloved which mean every thought of him is running in my mind and that cause me a lot of pain and ruining my world..
I just use a lot of symbolic meaning in this poem haha...well I'm a new poet teach me anything you can muahaha! Anyway thank you _________________ You can lies with your words, but you can't lies with your eyes ; You've denied that you love me, but your eyes had betrayed your words |
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Wed Dec 30, 2009 12:20 am |
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Zebruh
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I said I liked the replacement of "Night" with "Knight."
Not the misplacement. _________________ ಡ u ಡ
Ręp time. |
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Wed Dec 30, 2009 1:53 am |
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Izzy
Joined: 18 Feb 2009 Posts: 633 Location: Location: Location: Location: Location: Location: Location: Location: Location: Redundancy win?
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It's romancie.
I rate this, Comsi comsa. _________________
My three characters are: Americano, Fla1t and Zyzz |
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Thu Dec 31, 2009 7:49 am |
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-Ayane-
Joined: 29 Dec 2009 Posts: 21 Location: Inside your undies ;)
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Oh im sorry Zeb haha~
@Izzy - whats comsi comsa? _________________ You can lies with your words, but you can't lies with your eyes ; You've denied that you love me, but your eyes had betrayed your words |
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Thu Dec 31, 2009 8:19 am |
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Astraeos
Joined: 20 Oct 2009 Posts: 14
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Comsi Comsa is French for so so. xD _________________ Pandas :3
Īnscītia fēlīcitem est.
IGNs:
| Astraeus ~ Champ 255 |
| Noctem ~ High Priest 255 |
| E l o q u e n c e ~ High Wizard 255 |
| Cuddles ~ Gypsy | |
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Thu Dec 31, 2009 5:15 pm |
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Ayane
Joined: 09 Mar 2008 Posts: 7 Location: I'm in your panties~ check it out~?! >:D
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Aw? _________________
RainRO's official launch day was October 19th 2007. Remember it!
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By YanZz~ <3 |
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